Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Only one thing stood between me and the approaching cattapillar . my sword. I tried to slice the evil thing but it was two small I missed every time, i tried to run but I soon realized it was too fast , I went through my wepons, a knife , a blade , a poiseness gas grenade of course the grenade . I took it out of one of the compatments on my belt , I hurtled it at
the green worm . Soon purpel gas sprayed out of the hole in the top of the grenade , I felt it burn down my throwt and poisen my lungs , in my dying breath one thought passed through my mind 'I had done it , I had killed the beast'.
Uhh...okay, this is a little bit confusing on first impression here because I just genuinely find it quite hard to tell what this is trying to accomplish here. We've got what appears to be someone trying increasingly dangerous ways to take out a caterpillar. The amount of detail isn't enough here to tell if this is a regular random harmless one and this person just happens to dislike caterpillars or if this is some sort of actual monster. On top of that I love the humor there in the exceeding powers used to vanquish this thing but the ending takes it towards a more darker note with the death there and then suddenly the tone you're going for just sort of falls apart for me because it seems as if it is a bit too over the line to be properly humorous but also too geared towards being humorous to work as a serious piece.
Overall this one leaves me with a bit of a conundrum here because I genuinely can't tell what you want to accomplish here and whatever it is trying to accomplish its not doing a particularly good job of it at the moment.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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